Mornin Beth...

I thought you did a good rewrite too...
I'm wondering about the last line here...
is there a pronoun problem or not.....
who is the HE.... does that refer back to the HIS or the
drunken buddy.....
and I guess I'm the oddone out...I'm not getting the connection here.... Did the husband..just sit there and allow it.....?
is that the idea...(sorry i really can be dense)....
because I'm not getting the connection other wise....why that was the defining moment...

Let me read it again....I'm probably just being dense.....
Hugs....
Kaley smile


Soon enough her fantasy
Was challenged by the reality
Of his basking in the shadows of his moments in the sun
But too proud to admit it
For seven years she hid it
Til his drunk buddy groped her, and HE laughed “we’re just havin’ fun.”