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RY X
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/21/26 04:03 PM
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Soft Loft
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/21/26 11:52 AM
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8Graves
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/20/26 06:05 PM
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Saosin
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/20/26 02:43 PM
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Spiritbox
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/18/26 09:51 PM
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TV Drama
by Bill Draper - 09/18/26 02:22 PM
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Syd
by Gary E. Andrews - 09/17/26 09:40 PM
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Joined: Aug 2007
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Hiya Beth,
I'm gonna jump right to it.
I like the idea of a Dead End girl. A lot! Unfortunately your first verse doesn't want to cooperate. Especially when you consider how brave a woman must be (sorry ajk) to make the first move in a relationship. Juiced or not - she went for it.
Now add the confidence to say,"Do you believe in love at first sight?", and it's safe to assume that this woman is a hard one to break. But she does... and only 4 lines into the chorus.
So yeah, I think this girl's gotta fix her problem before she crosses that bridge into the final chorus. Or she'll be forever known as,"oh her!". Which I find so unfortunate... 'cause I really hoped she wouldn't have to turn herself around.
Still likable either way, Randy -Dog
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"BMOC" -- Last Rewrite...in 1st post, beneath original version
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 06:22 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Calvin
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09/10/07 11:20 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 03:25 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Wyman Lloyd (D)
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09/10/07 03:51 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Sofa King Bixby
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09/10/07 04:02 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 04:27 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 04:16 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Janice Hopkins
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09/10/07 03:56 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 04:23 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Janice Hopkins
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09/10/07 04:29 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 09:34 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Joice Marie
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09/10/07 04:35 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 09:39 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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"Tampa Stan" Good (D)
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09/10/07 05:15 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/10/07 09:45 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Janice Hopkins
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09/10/07 09:58 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Kaley Willow
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09/10/07 11:46 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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John W. Selleck
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09/10/07 11:59 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Richard G Blum (D)
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09/11/07 12:53 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 01:55 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 04:38 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 04:43 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 04:48 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Bobbie Gallup (D)
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09/11/07 05:44 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 06:28 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Derek Hines
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09/11/07 12:32 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/11/07 03:30 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Richard G Blum (D)
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09/11/07 04:41 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/12/07 01:51 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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PogoDog
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09/11/07 06:19 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/12/07 01:52 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/14/07 05:57 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 03:57 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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PogoDog
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09/15/07 11:35 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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PeterJ
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 06:47 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 06:44 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!) *DELETED*
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Derek Hines
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09/15/07 12:34 PM
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Wyman Lloyd (D)
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09/15/07 04:55 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 06:56 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Derek Hines
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09/15/07 05:17 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Lynn Orloff
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09/15/07 05:53 PM
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 07:16 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/15/07 07:02 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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PogoDog
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09/16/07 03:12 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Wyman Lloyd (D)
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09/16/07 03:50 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/16/07 05:55 AM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Kaley Willow
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09/16/07 05:14 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/16/07 05:32 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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09/16/07 10:18 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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John Voorpostel
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09/16/07 10:27 PM
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Re: "BMOC" -- (you're RIGHT, it DOES spell COMB backwards!)
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Beth G. Williams
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