Hiya Beth,

I'm gonna jump right to it.

I like the idea of a Dead End girl. A lot! Unfortunately your first verse doesn't want to cooperate. Especially when you consider how brave a woman must be (sorry ajk) to make the first move in a relationship. Juiced or not - she went for it.

Now add the confidence to say,"Do you believe in love at first sight?", and it's safe to assume that this woman is a hard one to break. But she does... and only 4 lines into the chorus.

So yeah, I think this girl's gotta fix her problem before she crosses that bridge into the final chorus. Or she'll be forever known as,"oh her!". Which I find so unfortunate... 'cause I really hoped she wouldn't have to turn herself around.

Still likable either way,
Randy -Dog