Beth,

I like this one alot and can relate to it. We all knew guys like that in school. When we see them at the reunion, they are still fully grounded in their youth and we feel relief that we had the good sense to look for someone who offered more.

This is very well written. It does flow nicely. The only nit I have is that maybe you could use the bridge a little more effectively to resolve the situation. It wasn't quite clear to me what the absolute outcome was going to be. I hear it possibly as country or maybe pop. What did you hear in your head? It's doing great though. Love the hook.

Later,

Jan

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