So lets see one thing at a time...trying to grasp...each line must stand on it's own, no matter what position that line is in the verse.

I am thinking going back to English 101..

There must be a subject and verb; complete, sentence?

So, its like if I was to take that line out of the context of the song and by itself...It should read as a sentence/a statement. In short stand alone.

mmmm...okay.

Now I'm getting; just rereading your notes; each line stands alone..

Second thing reason I put female and male singer; for the sole purpose of defining who is speaking in the verse...male talking to his wife in second verse...No I don't have the talent to be a musician..I think you need to start in elementary school, but then again, just read a website about an Engineer from Chicago picked up the guitar in his 50's...he has a site with old country lyrics...a place for me to go back in study.

Going off track here. Okay, now to work on 2; now I understand the verses had too much going on (extra lines;complaints save for verse 3).

What about the change of the chorus; see Roy's Chorus.

Petra

Last edited by Petra; 03/22/11 05:49 AM.
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