Hi Petra. You called...

I think this is working its way through to a soon to be finished set of lyrics.. but I will give my POV.

My longest number of re-writes on lyrics was 17 re-writes. and each one changed direction lol.

I can only say what I would do if it was mine and I hope you are ok with my thoughts.

as usual everything is KOS.

I always put 4 or 8 lines or 12 in verses. yours are 10 which for me is hard to work with, so I guess that's a handy cap in many ways. I have changed to 12 because it seems to be easier for me to rhyme then.
And I also am not fond of a line leading to another that it relies on for a rhyme. Just me lol

I am not sure about the 'ALADDIN SONG' as I feel some will not understand it. If it was 'Magic Lamp' sure. Just my opinion.

So my take would be. and its just that, my take.

God Bless Roy and Helen


ALADDIN SONG


Verse1: female singer here

I don't care that you're losing hair
And that you try to hide the fact
In fact I find it quite cute
You wearing your baseball cap
I don't mind dishes in the sink
Or clean towels on the floor
And promises you don't keep
Like. honey, I'll fix that door
I don't mind the note on the fridge
"I'm With The Boys" Gone Fishing
But I can't ignore this feeling
That 'something is missing'.

Pre Chorus:
MAGIC LAMP OH MAGIC LAMP
Chorus
Bring back the ROMANCE
Please my life enhance
Weave ME a spell FOR two
It's a long ways overdue . . .
Grant us THIS ONE WISH
Let us seal it with a kiss

Verse 2: male singer
[b]
I don't mind your old nightgown
And the curlers in your hair
You won't hear me complaining

That's how far I got Petra. If you want me to carry on, just give me the nod.

You may hate what I have done. so please just use loose or abuse it.

God Bless Roy and Helen


Last edited by Roy Cooper; 03/21/11 09:06 PM.
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