Looks good so far. . .

When you first saw Roy's line
don't wait too much on me to know if it works
cause we could change it later if it gets in the way
or move it around

because

It was an excellent hook for the song theme as a whole
"what makes him tick"

maybe . . . but it ALL depends on how sad the "missing" part is!!

It might be a fun bridge OR (and don't start it now) whole other song about the same guy AFTER you fall back in love because of this song. Sequel to the same guy.

I'm a little distracted
Hey baby, what makes you tick
Sometimes you're "thick as a brick"
As Ian Anderson said
The flute playing Songwriter
The leader of Jethro Tull
He was. . .

ENDING

Baby what's that tickin'
Sometimes you're thick as a brick 'n
Sometimes something is missing
Hey Hey
Aladdin
Take me away

Take me away

Gadzooks!

Last edited by Terry G; 03/21/11 12:40 AM.