Hi Petra,

One other interesting thing here is that you have shown a natural ability in that you have created a refrain at the ends of your verses but you have a chorus as well.
The refrain, "something is missing" is a good one and so the song wouldn't even need a chorus because a repeating end-verse REFRAIN serves the same purpose as a Chorus.

So if your Chorus wasn't very good, I'd say scrap the chorus and use the bits of it elsewhere and just go with the refrain (something is missing" except that your chorus is cute too and so you can keep both refrain AND chorus.

But something ELSE to consider in mind is that the chorus idea is not new.
Steve Miller had a hit chorus with:
Abracadabra or Abraca DEBORAH"

Thanks for the co-writing offer but don't add my name to anything unless I say I want to commit to working on it O.K. :-)
I always appreciate when people recognize how little it takes to make someone worthy of a co-writing credit and makes the offer. That's songwriting professionalism. Most of the time I'm just freely giving the suggested changes and will turn down the offer.

MFB III was good enough to make me a co-writer and added my name but without my asking and I appreciate that. But because I wasn't captivated on the whole with his idea, I was just giving what I gave and SO NOW I end up feeling a little guilty because I wasn't really into committing to that whole song. I just wanted to help.

Terry