Originally Posted by Everett Adams
Drop the word bus after greyhound, that would give you an internal rhyme with "town" and "greyhound".Also
(Chasing rainbows and seekin' gold
Following where those colours go)

Just a couple of suggestions, might work and might not, I don't know your melody.

(I had dreams to catch and things to see) drop "I had"in this line.

(With dreams of playing the Ole Opry )drop "grand"


these are very good ideas and suggestions. However, they won't quite fit with the melody line. I have the mp3 of the old version posted earlier in this thread so you can hear the melody.

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