Hi One or two subtle changes to make it less clunky, sing better and help the words flow.


There were tears in my sweet Rose's eyes
When she said she'd always be there for me
A rambling boy with my head in the sky
There were dreams to live and things I had to see
Well I rode out of town on the last greyhound bus
Now I've been everywhere that one man can be
I passed through each town from New York to LA
Until I realized that home's where I should be
I only hope that she's still waiting there for me

My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
Girl, I'm coming home

A country girl with a pure southern heart
In a small and friendly farm town
Riding horses on her daddy's farm
Making sure her chores were done by sundown
We fell in love on an early spring night
While romancing at the Pike County fair
Bluegrass music on the car radio
Streaks of moonlight in the braids of her hair
I never realised that I should’ve stayed there

My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home

I took my freedom and travelled the world
Seen everything that any one man can see
Opened every pearl but I still miss my girl
In my heart I knew where I always should be
I just pray that she’s still waiting home for me

My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
I'm comin' home; I'm comin' home
My sweet Kentucky Rose
You know I'm comin'
Yes I'm comin' home to be right next to you
My sweet Kentucky Rose
You know it won't be long
It won't be long till I'm back home with you
My sweet Kentucky Rose
My sweet, sweet, sweet Kentucky Rose

I liked the "opened every pearl" line and hoped you could incorporate it so I put it back.

He travelled the world yet only went from New York to LA
I think you have to change the place names to somewhere a bit more exotic and far flung.
"I passed through each town from New York to LA" is hardly round the world
"Been to London, Paris, New York and LA." might be better.

I think this song has great potential and I liked the production. I do not think it is slow. However in the chorus the singer needs to lift a bit on the I'm comin home lines.
Best of luck with the song keep us posted on developments






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