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HER TOWN
by Kay-lynn Carew - 01/12/26 10:26 PM
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https://suno.com/s/HT8wqJLwVddvfC6Hp.s I wrote this YEARS before the song "5'oclock" somewhere. Ok guys.... sometimes I wanna kick Suno's butt cus I give it perfect guitar vocal to follow and it sprinkles in stuff... so just ignore that. I just did example verses, chorus etc. I have a great bridge but I didn't put it in the program yet.Just ignore that last piece of music drivel it puts in the end. V1 You never seem to get a day off well i just had a crazy thought you say sunday is the day you'll go and that's the only reason that you tell me no (pre chorus) China or Egypt or Paris France go get the calendar I'll get the map We'll figure this out, its a double dare I know it must be Sunday somewhere (chorus) It must be Sunday somewhere where the smell of fresh cut grass is blowing across the patio over my lemonade glass Not a cloud in the sky as we walk to the fair I know it must be Sunday somewhere V2 It's not a twist of fate it's just a matter of time I don't wanna havta havta wait in line we'll take our turn, out of turn , it's fair cos i know it must be sunday somewhere (bridge) I know how to change your attitude all we need is a different longitude If I can find the date line cross a little time line we can leave everything behind pre-chorus chorus
Last edited by Kay-lynn Carew; 01/02/26 08:31 PM.
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p.s. it took me 3 times just to get Suno to sing the word Egypt! The struggle is real
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Come on guys, I worked hard on this. Please comment, good or bad. Thanks!
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Short and sweet
Knocks me off my feet
Get to the chorus. Quick!
Which means only, I found the prechorus distracting.
Good one Kay-Lynn. Didn’t listen to the music yet.
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Short and sweet
Knocks me off my feet
Get to the chorus. Quick!
Which means only, I found the prechorus distracting.
Good one Kay-Lynn. Didn’t listen to the music yet. ok I'll wait.. (smile)
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Hmmmmnn,
There must be a songwriter somewhere...
DON'T WASTE YOUR TIME HERE... CANCEL CULTURE IS ALIVE AND WELL @JPF!
YOU'LL NEVER KNOW WHAT'S ALREADY BEEN DELETED...
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Hmmmmnn,
There must be a songwriter somewhere... What you mean? This is the right place. Bill
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Short and sweet
Knocks me off my feet
Get to the chorus. Quick!
Which means only, I found the prechorus distracting.
Good one Kay-Lynn. Didn’t listen to the music yet. ok I'll wait.. (smile) Nice. But just thinking, If singer and love interest are looking at maps and calendars, are they not spending time together…..aaaa now I see…..forget it, if it’s the day, he’s gotta stay. Ok I go listen Bill
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Listening to the music didn’t do anything for me.
I’ m back to not liking the prechorus. I like the details it adds, but don’t like its appearance so early.
The second verse seems weak. To advance the story, the second verse might be ,she is now on board with the ruse, but must convince her work place or boss or employer, that she gets Sundays off and it just so happens it’s Sunday in Singapore or wherever…
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That works Kay-Lynn , very original idea . Don't mind Tony , He's like Dom the greatest song writers on the planet
We’re all built from the same dust and dreams,
Different roads, but the same means.
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Listening to the music didn’t do anything for me.
I’ m back to not liking the prechorus. I like the details it adds, but don’t like its appearance so early.
The second verse seems weak. To advance the story, the second verse might be ,she is now on board with the ruse, but must convince her work place or boss or employer, that she gets Sundays off and it just so happens it’s Sunday in Singapore or wherever… Points taken. Sometimes I like to play with melodies and fun words and frankly, it's very fun to sing live.
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ok, once again, burying this topic til the name calling stops.
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I can do this all day.. pushing the post down over and over til you stop
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