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Hey Colin,

I sure appreciate the re-visit and your specific feedback.

It's funny you mention the sleeve/tissue line. In the original, I had "reached for a tissue"....but I had the vision of the guy just wiping his nose/tears on his sleeve. So it's the word "tissue" that's bothersome?

On the Eyes dry line...I guess he could experience it, but you figure as a guy, he wouldn't comment on that?

And finally, "spoon" is just something you don't think a fella would say?

I'll certainly take all this under advisement. I think I'm pretty committed to keeping it in the male POV, so I'll see what the rest of the gang thinks too, then take another look at it.

So thank you again Colin....and yeah, the rappin redneck was just a gag. ALTHOUGH, I'm thinking that would be a fun hook: A Rappin Redneck. I suspect it would center around his big ole belt buckle....

Have a good evening....
Beth