Hey Colin,

I suppose I don't help my Case For Male POV Case with that line...considering that I PERSONALLY fall down all the time! crazy

Maybe if I changed this:

But the wind is too strong
It pulls me along
This slippery slope is so steep
Don’t have what it takes
To put on the brakes
I call you when she falls asleep

to this:

Sure, the wind is kinda strong
But don' get me wrong
I ain't takin this "BEEPITY-BEEP"
You thought youse could break
Me wid boobs, nice but fake
Though widout 'em, I can't get ta sleep.

laugh

HEE HEE HEE. Perhaps something a bit less cavemannish? laugh

Seriously though, Colin, thanks for the feedback. As I said at the outset, I switched up the POV mid-stream...and though I like the reason for doing so....not sure it works for this particular song.

Have a good evening!!
Beth

P.S. As an aside, that's making me think of a potentially fun song challenge. Taking a "serious" song and making it funny...ya know, sort of JPF's answer to taking "a sad SOOONG and make it BEEEEETTTTER"). Or, the opposite. Take a funny song, and somehow make it serious. HMMMMM.

Anyhoo, thanks again! grin

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