Hi Beth,

I'm very late for the party, here's my take:

- the song's overall very good; a lot of great lines; words very wisely chosen both for their meanings and their sounds = lyrics that shouldn't be a problem to be set to compelling music.

- now, here are the lines I'd try to beat (not that I'd be right doing so):

"With pain bought and paid for": lots of "p"s in your text, all very good except the one for "paid", I don't know why, that could be just me

"I call you when HE falls asleep":
that makes the gal too unfriendly imo, waiting for - and maybe helping with pills, lol - her man to innocently go asleep and then grabbing the phone. Maybe something less active, like "think of you", something along that line would soften the situation a bit. Here again, that could be just me.

Apart from these little nits, I think you've written great lyrics with that one. Take care,

Yann

"Honey, I know, I know, I know times are changin' / It's time we all reach out 4 something new" (Prince)

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