Well. I'll have to think some 'bout this one.

What's wrong with spooning? It's not illegal, is it? Even in California?

I could see (hear?) a guy singing most of this; one would have to change a few words, but not many. I think it'd probably be easy to make it gender-neutral (or whatever the term is in this post-spooning world).

It is a little dissatisfying the way it ends. Yes, stickin' with the spouse (whichever sex the spouse is) is good; one should encourage socially desirable behavior (and that's not done enough, in my opinion). Still, I wish your protagonist could feel better about it. I don't know if that's necessarily a Guy Thing. I think guys (maybe just me) do appreciate blunt, hit-you-upside-de-haid happiness (boobs, buds, beer, and the remote); I'm not sure why one should assume girls have to settle for less.

That help any?

Joe

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