Hi Michael and Kristi,
I have listened many times.
A work with this much production demands that.
This is a really complex work. I am trying to get my head around it. And it is not easy. There are so many movements and musical parts. To really understand your intention takes some time and listens.

My first reaction is to say that snap in the first verse should be a signature sound, a hook. It comes across as fresh, crisp, compelling and very unique. Then it goes away. The second round of verses are different in their delivery and you are gaining momentum so perhaps it did not fit. I vote you consider going back to the simpler arrangement of the first three stanzas so that can be used again. (by the way in my own music my ideas rarely work).

Second, you have so much going on but the overall feel is very light. My personal experience is the more you add the more everything gets thick and heavy. Not here everything keeps a very light touch. In short excellent recording and mix.

Third, Michael you performance is excellent. You sing every note like it is important. That is really hard to do I think, at least it is very rare and very pro.

My nits are:
The way it is written, the first line "There is a place I can always run away to" is a pre and should be separated from the rest of the chorus. It just threw me off.

Though the chorus is beautifully played and sung it does not take off to my ear. It has a similar cadence to the verse. My ear just wanted it to break into it own distinct syncopation more quickly. It does in the long run but it takes a while to get there. No one else has mentioned this so it could very well just be me.

Kristi, good work, I hold your work as a level above. That said the second and third stanza did not have the same mysterious feel that the rest of the lyrics had. Though they were well written and compelling, it seemed like a slight departure to me.

Very high level of work you two. You elevate this forum. Thank you.

Tom

Last edited by Tom Franz; 09/08/09 12:50 PM.