Beth,

Well, I think this is well-written. You've done a lot of work on this and gotten some great feedback. You’re going with the female POV I see, so I’ll just go with that flow….This contains a lot of emotion, from sad to contemplative to hopeful that gives it some nice layers. It’s touching because the narrator never verbally tells the people in her life anything of what we hear. So we are privy to the facts of her story.....which is cool. smile

I like how you bring it full circle at the end with the title line, “at last there’s a change in the weather after coming from the first verse’s: “A hopeful belief/The landscape will somehow transform” I like the subtlety of those statements that relate to each other like that. Plus, it gives the narrator a place to go...forward.

It's carefully done.....nice work! smile

Kristi

A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist