Hi again Bobbie. Well we've got a disagreement on the vowel rhyme thing. To me , it messes a song up completely when it's sung. Maybe doesnt other people. Going by your last verse , you're rhyming 2 and 4 and 6 and 8. In verse one , you've got an imperfect rhyme between 2 and 4 and a perfect ryhme between 2 and 5. Be that as it may , all I can do is critique it as I see it. Just going to do the first verse, keep or sweep

I badly needed a break and something to eat
'Cause I'd been drivin' all night
Knew the food should be good,just an old sign made of wood
But a row of trucks parked outside
With a smile as warming as sun in the morning
Creeping over the canyons rim
The waitress said coffee's hot, she left the whole pot
Said , I can see what you need my friend

Think the ideas good . Been done of course but so has most everything else.