Thanks SO much, Mary. I think it is easier to feel the meter I am after if you split the lines with the internal rhyme into two lines...ie:
With a big windshield crack
and a mutt in the back
I saw that dented old pickup pull up
A young couple got out
and there was no doubt
That this was a pair in love
AABCCB
She was giggling and grinnin'
and laffin' at him
As she grabbed the back pocket of his jeans
They sat side by side
and never tried to hide
They had something more precious than things
AABCCB

The last four lines of each verse end up being a climb...but they have the same meter and rhyme as the rest of the verse.

Please come back if you have time. Appreciate the comments very much.

Bobbie


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