Hi Bobbie,
Fun excercise. Amazing sometimes what you can come up with working face to face.
The leadin from the first verse into the first chorus. ...... I realize my initial thought would require a number of changes back down the line, (but of course I didn't notice that until I looked back at the rest of the lines)
But consider

All I get is icy indifference
As you're FREEZING me out

Yrah, might not have the meter right, but FREEZING OUT seems to be the lead-in I envision.But then you can't keep

That's worse than walking out"

hmmmmm, not much help, huh? [Linked Image]

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Harriet