Dave,

IMO, the song is an attitude.
90% of it is delivered with;

"You couldn't give a damn, you know what I'm tawkin 'bout.
So let the dog in the house and put yo' stanky ass out."

IMO..the rest of it could be written a thousand ways, but the point is coming across, and I have tried to state it in "trailer park" jargon.

Nonetheless, I appreciate your re-write and in the very unlikely event that there is any future reason to come back to the song, I will re-read your re-write and go from there.

Note: I do plan to put the stems in my DAW and EQ it and adjust levels for streaming. When I do that I am going to look at the BPM and maybe shave a couple off. That might make it seem a little less rushed to you.

Thanks again,
Marty

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