Thanks Dave.

I'll switch out the SC link for the SUNO link in a few minutes, if that doesn't require an account for listens.
BTW, someone who writes songs as well and as avidly as you should get themselves a SC account.

As far as rushed, I don't disagree.
Otoh, a hurried pace was appealing (to me)
I also viscerally liked the overlay of the vocal lines on the fast-rolling electric guitar riff.


I went through many of iterations of the song.
The prosody seems be tied to the BPM. The iterations with higher bpms had bumpy prosodys.
On all of them, there was a hit and miss quality to the prosody. (isochrony)

Some versions would have about the same BPMs as others, yet in one iteration, in a particular spot, the prosody would be fine, in another version, the alignment in the same spot would be clumsy.

I think that the version that you did not hear is better than the one that you did with regard to that. Neither one is perfect.
I'll link it to SUNO now.

https://suno.com/s/rc30UZVX9pscC20t

Any insight that you have on using SUNO would be appreciated.

Thanks for stopping by,

Marty

https://soundcloud.com/sunset-poet-of-texas