Kimberly, Sweet song. But you're right about the 1st V, Maybe if you use a flower color instead of "sweet blue" maybe "violet" or "cornflower."

I agree with Dottie, there could be more variety to the melody(s) V CH BR

I heard a few unneeded words, breaking the flow, Let the singer eliminate any unnecessary conjunctions or pronouns. Remember a note can be held and a pause is a musical note.

JMO find another phrase for one of the two lines in the chorus that end in to me.

In the bridge "in the moon light' might be more compatible with midnight (the "mmm" "ite" sound spacing)

I hope I don't sound sharp with all these comments, but I have always
admired the completeness of your critiques and I do think this is a great write. KOS

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