Hi Mike,

WOW!!! You have never critiqued (if that's a word) one of my songs but when you do you REALLY do!

First things that really struck me, you said exactly the same thing as one of the pro crits I have about making v2 v1. Also she/he said v1 was vague. The whole song is vague really. Like I told Stan it's very hard for me to be objective about this song, I'm too close to it, and to me it's perfectly clear!

You have helped me more than all of the critiques put together, and there must be 4-5 of them so far! What was really so confusing is one of the coaches at Songu said "I wouldn't change a word in the lyric" then (the same coach) said it's too vague, make v2 v1, lol and I still didn't want to change a thing!!

My husband loved the verses, I loved them, I didn't want to change them...I FINALLY understand why I need to...It's not even the verses that I'm in love with now, it's the beautiful music that the verses inspired Terry to write, so they have served their purpose already...

I’m going to study this critique and I’m going to fix this lyric if it’s the last thing I ever do!! I’m not a quitter and I know Terry isn’t either, we decide a while back that it was worth continuing to work on.

Thank you SO much!!! I am really thrilled that you took the time to help me understand!! smile

Dottie

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