Dottie,
You are really close to something really substancial with this.
I love the crispness and clairity of the verses.
To me the chorus does not flow as simply as the verses. But close. Really close.
And if I am honest, I am not sure about the dead end line in the pre.
But this makes it sound like I don't like it. I DO! It is so close I am looking at it differently than most songs.

Good Work,
Tom