Hi splitpea,

very nice to hear from you
thanks for taking the time to listen and write Some random thoughts:

I'm glad you feel it has a Strong hook and a Pretty melody.

it's interesting that you prefer the Dave Brooks version. The warmth of his vocals elevates the song.
Dave is such a versitile singer

thanks for your concerns on the 3rd line and that the verses could use fresher language and/or imagery.

Is there a way to convey this image so that it sounds new again?
~~~> maybe

I don't feel the "chorus feels too resolved."

eventually is some fuzzy moment in the future, it might take weeks, months or years.

it's been cut a couple times, just nothing big yet.

thanks gain Mitch

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