Ande: I think the verses are well constructed and the production is right up there quality-wise. I am almost afraid to say what is bothering me about this and I am not even sure that it is worth saying to you since you seem to be very well versed in this line of work. But for what it is what is bothering me is the word eventually. I don't know if it is the word itself or the way it is sung, but it somehow does not flow. It does not come off the toungue smoothly which it appears that it should. I mean it should be a slam dunk of a song cause everything is working for it until it comes to the "eventually" word. Its a five sylable word so maybe since you have to squeeze it into a 4-4 meter it doesn't quite get there. In my opinion just stops the song dead in its tracks. Maybe I am wrong. I actually hope I am wrong, cause I like everything else about it.


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