Fd

You wouldnt know.

On this website, when MAB makes a case for something, he does it with clarity, even when lengthy.

You have lucid moments, but mostly are meandering and digressive, following your thoughts where they may lead at the time. It's foggy.
MAB reads like a very seasoned working professional who actually does know the rules.
You read like a duffer, like me, like most of us here. At times, such as your recent flourish...you read like a pretender.
Yet, you want this website to be the unofficial FD school of song critiquing where you establish the rules and everyone gets in line with your curriculum. That is DOA.

And the fact that you cant realize how DOA it is, underscores how much of a duffer you are.

I dumped on your lyrics because they are not very good and to give you a current case in point as to why...your version of tough love song critiquing....is neither accurate, nor meant for this site.

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