Michelle,

Hi! it's been way too long since I dropped in on one of yours.

I have told you this dozens of times but will gladly risk the redundancy of saying it again...you are a FABULOUS lyricist! This lyric has Top-Ten written all over it. And Gretchen Wilson would be PERFECT for this. I wouldn't change one single word in the lyric. It's about as close to perfect as you're ever gonna get it, in my opinion.

Your vocalist, Roxie, is super on this...an absolutely perfect voice for this song. But I am with the camp that thinks the music hurts it. I agree with the several comments that a good publisher would see/hear beyond the music and recognize the potential of your lyric. However, it has to get to the publisher, per se. Most of your larger publishing houses have screeners who decide what goes forward for a second listen and what does not. I'm not sure they would appreciate the song behind the music.

I've been told so many times from publishers and music insiders that you have to catch the ear of the publisher, or the publisher's screener, within 15 - 30 seconds and the demo has to demand their attention. I am sure there are exceptions to that; but that's what I've been told so many times. I think the backing tracks (the music tracks that backup the singer) could diminish your changes of this getting a "second listen" from many publishers.

You have a Contemporary Country song and vocal with an uninspired Traditional Country backing. The drums are totally wrong for all of it...the other backing tracks and the vocal.

If it works for your budget, I would suggest trying another demo elsewhere. This is a GREAT song that should be presented with all the punch and sizzle you can get with it.

This is a an abslolutely GREAT/FABULOUS song but the music behind it is hurting it. Sorry I couldn't be more positive about EVERYTHING, as I was with your wonderful lyric. But, I told you when we collaborated a few months ago that I would be honest with my opinions.

Best of luck with this one. As I said, I think it has Top-Ten written all over it in bold letters...it just needs the right music.

Alan

Last edited by Al David; 08/08/09 03:36 AM.