First off, I do not understand the lyrics or the subject matter. Perhaps it relates to a card game or video game or certain expressions that I am unfamiliar with, but they do not mean anything to me. That does not automatically mean I don't like it - I don't know what Neil's After The Gold Rush is about either, but I like the song!

Musically, the melody is pretty good and the chord pattern is pleasing. I would not have known the chorus was the chorus if I wasn't reading along.....it could stand to be more hooky or differentiated and I think shorter.

The instruments are the best part of the song. They are well played and recorded, although I would vote for more stereo separation in the mix. The vocal is soulful and intense but off pitch in several places.

All in all, I have mixed feelings about it. The lyrics are very much in your face and are an important part of the song in its present form, so they have to draw you in. In my case they do not, with the exception of the actual hook which has a nice ring to it. The music is pretty good and with the right lyrics would work well.

I will be looking forward to Pat's comments.



Colin

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