Originally Posted by Jean Bullock
Hi, Scott.

I like the bridge a lot. Chorus is fine and I like your singing and your harmonies.

I think the melody of the verse needs a little more work. Some of the syllabic inflections don't quite fit the melody as well as they could and in the last line of each verse, I think a more dynamic melodic statement would be more effective.

Take care and good luck to you.



Thanks for the suggestion, Jean. The verse melody is definitely the weakest part - first three lines are identical and the fourth just a little different. That would be the place to focus attention, alright. I'll see what I can do. Appreciate it!

Scott