Hi, Scott.

I like the bridge a lot. Chorus is fine and I like your singing and your harmonies.

I think the melody of the verse needs a little more work. Some of the syllabic inflections don't quite fit the melody as well as they could and in the last line of each verse, I think a more dynamic melodic statement would be more effective.

Take care and good luck to you.








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