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Bobbie thanks for the idea! I'll apply the too tight halo to myself and use scripture to back it up. If anyone recognizes themselves in the song, I can say who was talking about you? Maybe call it, "Haloretentiveitis."

Charlie, thank you for the response . This particular song is aimed for the Catholic/Episcopal and possibly Lutheran churchgoers. If I ever perform this in front of an audience unfamiliar with the terms, I'll have to give a little background before I sing it. If you read my post, "Day Of Rest," which is a few pages back, it may help you with the terms. That song would preface this one if I ever get to do an album.

I have written fun songs to help teach Bible stories, but I didn't think about the Garden of Eden. Hmmm…that could be very funny. Thanks.


Judy, Judy, Judy! Thank you. I would love to hear the Baptist song! Can't wait.

Sharon, thank you so much. I agree with you that many of the Psalms are not sweet at all. One minute they say how kind and merciful God is and then they ask God to grind their enemies into the ground and send them to the pits of Sheol. And all in the same breath. After reading the Psalms, and then looking at the Middle East, I don't see how it's changed at all. Maybe all that hot desert air and sand is just too much for people.

Anthony, thank you so much for reading this and your kind remarks. I think you are right about the chorus. When I notate the song, I will make the correction. Thanks for the tip. Don't worry about which one of us is speaking. The one you have to worry about is Mean Mz. Jean. Shh. Do not wake her up!

Graham, thank you for reaching up from down under! Just for fun, as an endurance test, you should go to Mass, then you would understand. I kind of left the Jewish part for last so I can say that even they don't like it. Thanks for the suggestions.

Mary, thank you so much for your support here and in other posts as well. Who says they aren't helpful. You can be sure that when you find a nit, I will certainly pay attention. If even Mary says so, then I'll know that I have corrections to do. It isn't quantity, it's quality.

Hi John. I think you and Anthony are right about the refrain. I'll try it the way you suggest and see how it works. How about you writing some humorous "true" history songs. That would make a great CD.

Blake, thank you so much. I have received so much positive reinforcement today that I had to, OUCH, take off my halo.

Eschew is a very pompous word. That's why I like it. It sticks out like a sore thumb. I could preface the song in performance with a kind of a word of the day, thing. That might help those who are used to using reasonable language.

Some people know what it means, they've just never heard it pronounced. That how pompous it is. Thank you so much for the reading and the suggestion. It's a valid one.

Marian, thank you for the point about staunch Catholics. Nobody is stauncher than my mom. She doesn't like the way the Psalms are sung either. I did share this with the Principal of my school, and several very staunch Catholic Colleagues. (I teach music and art at a Catholic School.) They thought it was funny, because they don't like singing them either. I'll ask my mom to show it to her friend the Bishop and see what he thinks. Thanks for the warning.

Ben, thank you for your reading and your support.