Love it JeannieBee,

I'm with Anthony though on the repetition.

What might work is to start out with it, but you speak it with music in the background, then you come in with your verses, say three of them, before you repeat the refrain there and maybe after the last verse. But that is an arrangement thing as much as anything...you have the solid base here.

And yup, a "gently" humorous CD is a winner IMO.


If writing ever becomes work I think I'm going to have to stop