Hey Moker...

I've been gone a while..a little over a year. So good to hear one from you on my return!

Pretty decent for a work tape....damned good, actually. I tend to agree with Mike about those two lines in the chorus....particularly "And get to the bottom of this". Those lines jumped out at me as well...they seemed to go in a different direction than the rest of the lyric. Here's a suggestion for a direction to go there:

You wrote....

I'm gonna need a Life Line
sometime tonight
& a wing man to keep her friends
occupied
so we can slip away 'til the light o' day
and get to the bottom of this
got a feeling to find out what's blowin' my mind
I'm gonna need a Life Line

My suggestion (The words in parentheses are explnationsof why I suggested that particular line, not part of the suggested change per se)...

I'm gonna need a Life Line
sometime tonight
& a wing man to keep her friends
occupied
so we can slip away 'til the light o' day
***I'm gonna let her rescue me*** (rescue me...correlates with need a lifeline theme)
***And I'll let her save me with a little mouth-to-mouth*** (save me & mouth-to-mouth...correlate with need a lifeline theme)
I'm gonna need a Life Line

I rarely disagree with Kevin (Emmerich)...I find that's usually not a good idea! But, in this case, I shall do so...sorry Kevin! I think the pre-chorus is great. Two of the best lines in the song are there and it's a nice transition into the chorus.

Nice work, Moker! With a touch of tweaking, I think you'll have one to be real proud of. Good luck with it!

Alan