Hey Drop,

I'm so glad I read some of the responses before commenting myself...because yeah, I was confused too. I actually got the marriage part at the beginning, but then got mixed-up again. Sounds like you have some good suggestions about how to tend to that though....

How about this: While maybe she doesn't get away in the end...perhaps The Warden allows her to go to see her dying mother "on parole" or something...so he lets out the leash a little, but not too much. I agree, there isn't always a happy ending....and as Al mentioned, WHY you're writing this song will dictate what you do or don't change.

Otherwise, musically and lyrically, it is a very pretty and sad song. Your voice really pulls off the story, and your guitar playing is quite nice. Ironically, though -- given the subject matter -- the music is actually quite soothing...

Anyhoo, I look forward to hearing where you take this....

Good luck and thanks for sharing,
Beth

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