Hi Drop:

It is a very pretty song with a great vocal and melody.

I wouldn't have figured it out without an explanation. But there are plenty of songs that I don't know what's going on and like 'em anyway.

Kinda depends on your goals, I guess. Doesn't seem commercial in its present state but that is more a comment on the current scene than on the song. smile

If you are to be the artist, why not just use it as is and let people hear a pretty song and wonder what it's about?

If you are gonna try to pitch it, maybe tighten up the story line.

In any case, it's a good one.

Scott