Hi Bob,

Sure appreciate you taking time to read and ponder on this one for me. It truly means a lot. I want this to have maximum impact and polish before turning it over to the publisher...so thanks for your suggestions. I did go in and take out that word crystal in the eyes line.

The strange thing is, I had originally written that chorus in a style almost identical to what you are suggesting..with the 5 line thing. But I had recalled someone..thought it might have been you saying earlier that 5 line choruses gave composers fits LOL so I added that line to make it a 6 line chorus. I kinda like that dangling idea there. Will keep that thought in the pile for the rewrite.

Thanks SO much.

Bobbie

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