Hi folks. I haven't been around as much as I would like but I have some older lyrics I'd like to post for review. They were written by my collaborator (I normally create the melodies and he writes the lyrics). I have a rant that has to do with them (not what you may think) but I'd appreciate some feedback first to see if my rant is justified. I'll explain in detail after I get a few responses.

thanks much,

Van

TALL AND THIN

The fat man’s walking faster now
He keeps his face turned toward the ground
He wonders how he got this way
He wanders through another day

Resigning himself to his fate
He stares down sadly at his plate
He can’t believe what he just ate
His heart is straining from the weight

CHORUS
But in his dreams he’s tall and thin
Women falling all over him
He wakes up with a little smile
If only for a little while

The fat man hears the children laugh
They point at him as he walks past
He tells himself as he looks back
I wasn’t always this damn fat

CHORUS
And in his dreams he’s tall and thin
Women falling all over him
He wakes up with a little smile
If only for a little while

It was in dreams he slipped away
His heart just quit on him that day
He whispered through the fading light
I won’t be a fat man tonight

CHORUS
And in his dreams he was tall and thin
Women falling all over him
It woke him up with a little smile
If only for a little while

Copyright 1993 Paul Barile and Van Borden

Van Borden
a.k.a. Buzz Grudge