Originally Posted by Sunset Poet
Originally Posted by texritter
Originally Posted by Sunset Poet
251227 0358pm

Transitioned to Country without changing any terminology yet.

Ask SUNO for:
Modern country, female vocals, touch of Black blues, light steel pedal.

First try...
I wrote this song, yet hearing this female voice, tugs at my emotions more than I thought that it would.

https://suno.com/s/35PUVDbQKhtvFqZV

Marty,
This sounds good, but I might lose the line in your 3rd verse. My heart won't listen..., the other thing that doesn't ring right for me is (what might have bean) shouldn't it be (what might have been) JMO
Tex

Tx
Thanks for the input. I am going to re-write some of the terminology for the "country" and "eislish-ish " versions.
I'll put your comments on the agenda.

Regarding..."bean"...it is "been." I told SUNO to sing "bean" so that it would rhyme with dreams.
Regarding..."my heart wont listen"...please explain your objection.

Marty

I find that all the other verses are a AABB rhyme scheme and your 3rd verse is a five line verse. Making it an AABCC rhyme scheme. I do not think it's a bad line at all and I can see how you would like to fit it in. As far as (BEAN) and (BEEN) you've got it in your chorus and it wouldn't hurt to have your chorus a different rhyme scheme than your verses. Bean to a listener doesn't hit right, maybe some might not hear that it just hit's my ears wrong.
Good Luck