Thank you for taking the time to reply. Great comments.
I actually pondered dropping those ands. They do seem to muddy up the articulation.

The only reason I kept them was because (sadly) that is how I actually talk. So, it was conversational. I think I might just try a recording sans ands. Update soon.

Question: Are you saying that my line that starts with Cause would be better with Because, or scrap the whole word?


Thanks again!