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Away
Copyright 2006
Paul T Wetworth

Hey Baby How the time flies by
All I did was blink my eyes
And the Plan unfurled and it changed my world again

Hey lover how you look so fine
How long's it been maybe ten years time
But I still remember how we were back then

I was holding you we were walking alone at night
Moonlight was golden
Those hours were like little brilliant diamond lights
It felt like they were stolen away, away
Now we stand here in the light of another day
But we're not the same


Hey baby can you tell my why
Can't see love till its past us by
And we stay and fight thoughts that wake us in the night

Hey honey wil we ever learn
The page of life it will always turns
And you can't stop the wheel and things revealed to youdeny what reveals to you

Paul,

Good work. Repeating it, it's a little long, maybe put a solo in with less of a repeat. If you're aiming for Nashville, you've got to aim toward the hook, lyrically, a little more. I like the melody and the change up. Nice metering. Good singing.

Mike

Paul,

You have a very deverse taste in music, never know what style you going to use next Really like this one, the simplicity and a very nice mandolin part...Vocals are good and I love the backup vocals...tom

Mike: Thanks for your interest and help with this tune. Hope to come back to it in a little while to consider incorporating the suggestions you made. Also appreciate any advice on how to pitch this one once I've refined it a bit.

Regards...Paul

Tom: I appreciate your spending time listening. Actually, the "mandolin' part was done with a couple of overdubed guitar parts, but it does indeed sound like I got a mando going in there. As I told Mike, I want to get back to this one and work on it a bit. For instance, it does not have any bass or much percussion to speak of other than a shaker, so I still have some work ahead to do on it.

Thanks again for listening and commenting on all my stuff and have a happy and prosperous new year.

Regards...Paul

G'Day,

Paul, this is a great track. I hear this track fully produced in my head and it works, the backing guitars is nudging me with a bit of that Rod Stewart feel, one of his more recent hits can remember which one, somehow I feel you are influenced by him I could be wrong.

I think this would be a fantastic movie sound track, in a scene where perhaps a girl/guy are separated and the movie is switching between scenes of both of them doing there thing in separate places, but remembering each other none the less.

Really great work - well done! And superior lyrics Paul THUMBS UP !!

Mozzie

Mozzie: Hello and welcome! Thanks for stopping in to listen. Hadn't considered this one for a movie, but it sure could work I reckon. I been thinking of targeting this to the country market, but haven't quite decided. Thanks again.

Regards...Paul

Hey Paul:

I really liked this - music just right, I thought. Gives a feeling that enough time has passed that any anger or sadness has been replaced more by wisfullness.

Second Tom on the mando and backing vox....

Second Mike on his idea too......

Scott

Hey Paul

I love this feel... the verse melody especially going on that last line was just GREAT!
With those climbing changes very very cool, very musical.

I think the chorus section can use more certainty like the verses have..

Really like this!
Sub

I like this too, great melody and sound, maybe a little Nitty Gritty Dirt Band kind of sound?

THanks Scott: This one's seeming to me like it may go places if I keep working out some of the kinks. I am happy that it touched you. It really is a pleasure bringing enjoyment through what I write. I know I would still be writing whether or not anyone paid attantion (at least I think I would) but its a reall good feeling to be recognixzed as a musician and songwriter. I will never get tired of that feeling.

Regards...Paul

Appreciate you thumbs up on this one Sub. Keeps me going. The more certainty comment I will think on. I'm not quite sure if you mean more certainty as to thye lyrics or the music or both. I will ruminate on it though and I'm sure it will hit me. It takes time for things to sink in lately. I like what you are doing.

All the best .....Paul

Paul,
Seriously good. This is how I would like to kraft my melodies. And this melody is crafted with talent too. You got it my friend.
Sub said it best that third line takes it from good to exceptional.
Guitars sound wonderful too.
Tom

Tom: Thanks for your listen here and also your comments. I am flattered that you called it well crafted. That I think is what I'm shooting for, but I don't conciously think of that when I'm working. But you have given me some inkling that what I'm writing this year is higher quality than what I wrote last year which is good and exciting. And keeps my fire burning, keeps me reaching.

Regards...Paul

Hi Paul,

I went back to figure out what the heck I was actually talking about lol...

It's this - your verse is REALLY catchy great, and it out does your chorus.
That is the verse is strong (certain) and the chorus takes to big a back seat.

Fortunatly I have figured out how to resolve this problem most definitly.
It's called Stealing we should steal the last melody of you verses.

I love your per-chorus no problem.. immediatley following the pre-chorus play & sing your last line of your verse. Except this time change the lyric and end the line with Away

It's gonna be very cool I believe try it and let me know!!!!

peace
Sub

Sub: First off I am getting excited about this little dialog we are having here. An definitely I am listening to what you are saying. I think I am following you when you said stealing. Now let me have a little time to play with it and get back to you about how it turns out.

Appreciate your unique insight.

Regards...Paul

paul-- Very good...I like your vocal...I like the song...the music is good also...I like the variety you always "throw" out there....t-bob

T-Bob: Hey man thanks for the kudos. I think I hope I can do something with this song. Been playing it out at a few gigs. Mixed response. Hope to keep working it and make it better.
Regards....Paul

I have done a little morework he song to make it fuller soundeing. SO I bumped it up for a second go round youcan hear the new version at : http://www.soundclick.com/bands/songInfo.cfm?bandID=82303&songID=4829341

Appreciate your comments.

Paul

Paul this is quite good....it reminds of a greatful dead or a band tune. I like the loose full rythym, lots of chiming chords sounds. Nice vocal and music backing. Enjoyed it.

I like the harmonies here especially. Cool listen--it's catchy. I'm running short on time so I'll have to stop there!
Thanks for sharing!

Linda

Paul,

Excellent listen and superb melody. The guitar parts fit together so nicely. It kind of has a Jerry Garcia playing old time music feel. I really enjoyed this and wish you luck in promoting it - it seems like a winner to me.

Clint

Mr Rush:Thanks foer the kudos here. I made some progresshere I think and you seemde to think dso as well. I hope to tighten u the haemonies just a smidgen and maybe the lead guitar parts too.. surprising how a little bit of processed guitar sound can liven things up a mite. Have a gereat day today sir.

Paul

Linda:Am delighted you stopped by for a brief comment. Appreciate also that you enjoyed the songe. Hope you have a day.

Regards,,,Paul

Clint:I appreciate your comments. I hope I canpromote it some time soon and hope to be able to play it out a festivals in the spring and summer.Its got a unworn classical feel about it as you said kind old time Garcia Music. Thanky for those kind thoughts Clint

See ya soon...Paul