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Well Guy , this is one song of yours that actually tried to say something, so I'll try to review.
I like the first verse,
Id change pre chorus to FLY not try, birds don't try...
I think the wording for chorus is a bit preachy. You can say what I think your trying to say just by examples only, don't need to tell people how to think.
I don't like the second example about the boy as much.
Equating birds wanting to fly, and someone wanting to die is I guess ok, both natural forces and we shouldn't try to stop it,if that's their wish.
Hey Guy, this is a really touching and quietly powerful song — simple, folk-like, and deeply human. It already has a strong emotional backbone. In my opinion, what it could possibly use is a little polish for rhythm, natural phrasing, and poetic flow — without losing its innocence or universality. Here are a few ideas. Feel free to use anything here. All the best - Robert
You Better Let It Be
Verse 1 If a small bird wants to fly Spread its wings across the sky If a small bird wants to fly Give it a lift — don’t ask it why
Pre-Chorus When it’s the right time to try When it’s the right time to try…
Chorus You better let it be You better let it be You better let it be Oh, just let it be
Verse 2 If a young boy wants to ride Free and proud on his bike outside If a young boy wants to ride Let him go and trust his stride
Pre-Chorus When it’s the right time to run When it’s the right time to run…
Chorus You better let it be You better let it be You better let it be Oh, just let it be
Verse 3 If someone old wants to die In peace beneath an open sky If someone old wants to die Please respect that last goodbye
Pre-Chorus When it’s the right time to go When it’s the right time to go…
Final Chorus You better let it be You better let it be You better let it be Oh, just let it be
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