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by JAPOV - 04/27/26 10:49 AM
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WHEN?
by JAPOV - 04/23/26 11:28 PM
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I love the first verse, it really sets up what can be a great tune. I see some very catchy pop melody that makes this a happy, driving tune.
Lyrically, verse 2 doesn't go anywhere -- I'd re-write that one. Chorus # 2 is on the weak side, too. I would can it and just repeat chorus #1 (chorus #2 reads like a bridge).
Why the question marks in the outro chorus?
Overall great start, but needs some re-writing in my opinion.
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