Dan,

Glad you are back among us. Nice song. Your voice and guitar sound good.

The first two lines of the chorus are crying out for harmony vocals IMHO.

Don't know if you are worried about sounding "current" or not. The word hobo seems to have passed out of favor. Not sure the average young person would know what a hobo is.

I think Matt offered some good ideas also.


Colin

I try to critique as if you mean business.....

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