Hi Man,

Problem is it tells and dont show no pictures,

I felt the wind on my face,Et-cetera could be so much better if it was put say--

<The Western wind that warmed the rain that washed my sun tanned face,>
okay it's just off the cuff, and it could certainly be improved
but then it's creating a picture that appeals to our senses

Touch, Feel, Smell, Etcetera.

Great idea but what you have written is like a synopsis,
it's all tell tell tell.

I know it's folk but it could be so much more interesting by using some more chords away from the ones you are using.


Without the right music your clever lyrics will never be heard, if you want success be prepared to re write many times and even change the meter you chose originally