Droptine,

Finally got a chance to listen and review a few songs. As mentioned to you in an earlier revierw, I really enjoy listening to you sing. You have very good voice with good control. And the guitar work on this is splendid. I listened twice and the guitar is still playing in the back of my head.

I do agree it would immediately diffuse the confusion, for most listeners, if you used that first line to analogize marriage and prison. If your goal is to present this as piece for the commercial market, I would seriously give that some more consideration. If, however, that is not your primary objective, then it's not as much an issue. Sometimes we just write a song to say what we want to say, how we want to say it...rules be damned.

It was a great piece to listen to either way. Nicely done!

Alan