Mark, really enjoyed listening to this, great mellowness and sense of listlessness in the meldody and lyric. Nice Noel Gallagherish solo at the end, I always enjoy a nicely pulled hamromic.

In terms of trying to improve it, personally I'd really try and energize the vocals more in the 2nd part of chorus, and really open up towards the end of the song. I think it would give the song a greater sense of depth.

Just some thoughts.

Lucian