Mark,

Way to come through with an on the spot vocal! Maybe the way to do it, huh? You have a good sound for this song. If you can go back,,,,,think about doing it again, (YOU still), and bring even more passion and feeling to the lines, now that you did that take, or takes. Emphasize the key words of communicating this song's message that it has. You did really good as is,,,,,so imagine even better!!!!

Is the guitar really needed throughout the whole song? Sounds like not to me. The melody of the song is having to compete with the guitar. Some key hooks would be good though. Less IS more in this case, I feel.

If the hit-hat and the acoustic guitar could come up in the mix, they would give this more of a moving beat, while keeping the feel flowing.
I like this overall though. Would just love to hear it tweaked!

YOU keep singing it!

John

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