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Well, seeing as how I'm "not named" as one of your E's (while I think I'd like to be the first one you mention, I have a sneaky feeling it might be the second one -- kerPLUNK!), I should probably add in my two cents here.

First off, too bad you couldn't work in that "bypass" line I suggested ( ha ha, inside joke folks, don't worry)....

Secondly, this is a fun one. I'm not sure if I'm reading it right though, since Tricia remarked how you'd been working too much, so how'd you have time for fooling around; I thought that was the point, that you are SHIRKING your working so you CAN heat things up a bit....

Anyhoo, liked Wolv's sug on HONEY, but I'm a bit confused about the "transaction" described in that verse. Is she a "working girl"? Otherwise, what is the "cost"? For me, it might help if that last lines went something like this:

This HONEY's been hittin' on me
She asked why I was puttin' her off
Well tonight if the two of us agree
TO CUT LOOSE, NO WORRIES 'BOUT A COST

Then in verse three, to address the Opposite Sex issue, and also to bring in the work/not work business a bit more, how about going a different route....

TIME TO QUIT LIVING TO WORK
GONNA WORK TO HELP ME LIVE
BE MORE OPEN TO LOVIN'
I'M READY WITH PLENTY TO GIVE

Of course you know how I came by the name Bethsledge. So I had to do a least a LITTLE tweaking to keep up my reputation.

Otherwise, nice work, Wy. Having seen it in it's infancy, with just two lines and a lot of potential, it's nice to see your baby all grown up.

Later,
Beth