Vondelle, good catch. So my hook is "Daddy's Advice" but I don't say what the advice is. I'm speaking in generalities, a common weak point in lyrics. That was one of the mistakes I was looking for.

Corey, thanks, I knew I could win something [Linked Image] I got a kick out of your Grandpa song.

I picked a few common problems I see when critiquing lyrics, so far that's two of them. There are more. Also, what could be done to make this better? Tell me without rewriting it.

Mike



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